Alright to be completely honest I do want to read this story but the way your dialogue is written is incorrect and you get get reported on here for that. So to save you the trouble, when you're writing make sure each person's sentence is on a different line, and when you write, don't type in their accents, like when you typed "jaysus". It's bothersome and you will get reported.
As for the story is sounds nice and I will stick.around as long as you make the changes and - make more detail in each chapter, explain emotions, their actions, etc.
So to save you the trouble, when you're writing make sure each person's sentence is on a different line, and when you write, don't type in their accents, like when you typed "jaysus". It's bothersome and you will get reported.
As for the story is sounds nice and I will stick.around as long as you make the changes and - make more detail in each chapter, explain emotions, their actions, etc.
Hope this helps, update soon babe x