Emotionless? If Only... - Comments

@ dancingwithangels
aww thanks for the feedback :), I'll work on the layout so it won't be as distracting lol xD

It's awesome! However you might want to balance out your characters conversing and description(meaning there is a lot of talking and not much describing). And try using a little more elaborate "He said" "she said" try using a Thesaurus. Oh and I love the emotion put into your context. It really kept me interested, and your layout is awesome but a smuge distracting and a little hard to read. Overall it was pretty awesome.