Devotion - Comments

This was amazing!!!! Omg, I thought at first it was a kid but then I kept reading and was ohhh lol sooo gooooood!!!!

DAMN! xDDD
Seriously, I was like; is this a real kid?! O.O
then my brain finally figured it out and was like HAHAHAHA
this was hawt xDD Very creative! :D

@ RachTheBat
she thinks your face is a good seat XD

It's helped me :)

Exactly!

@ Brian Haner Jr
LOLOL I woke up this morning with her ass in my face again

That's a good way of thinking, I'll keep that in mind! :D

Yeah, and Matt couldn't stay mad at that pretty face too long either

@ RachTheBat
I'd be Voldemort, no nose left xD

I do that too XD You lose track, that's all it is. Happens to all of us. Just remember this: KISS; Keep It Simple Stupid. :D Less is sometimes more.

I think THAT would have been too much drama for poor Brian. It worked out fine the way it is :D

@ Brian Haner Jr
I wouldn't have any hair left XD they'd be so cute though!

I've done that myself, then read it back and thought, what the fuck am I even saying? Haha. I'm more conscious of it now so yeah, hopefully it's just a faze I'll grow out of. I think it's cause I try and put as much detail as I can in but sometimes I just go way over the top haha.

Initially, I wanted Matt to find out and be really pissed about it, huge fight ensues, he walks out on Brian, the band try to help but Matt's a stubborn idiot. Eventually they talk about it and compromise on a few things and then hot sex with guitar haha. But I didn't leave myself enough time, I procrastinated stupid amounts and had like, two days to get it done D:

@ RachTheBat
Bella and Thor should have kittens, they'd be the most mischievous little shits ever.

Sometimes, "rambling" works, it does. But other times, it's like, "all of these words, what do they mean?" haha. I used to do it, I was terrible for running one sentence until it was the length of a bloody paragraph all on it's own. I think it's a faze, you do that and then you step up and move passed it, you will too :D And no problem, it's why I'm here.

You could try another one-shot, an alternate universe where Matt isn't accepting of it, just to try. But I don't think I could do it either xD

@ Brian Haner Jr
Having just been woken up by Bella sticking her nose in my ear, I was a little grumpy but your comment has cheered me up! :D

Thanks for pointing out my rambling, I do tend to waffle in sometimes. XD I'm working on it but thanks, I wish more people would do the same, helps me to improve.

I was toying with the idea if having Matt not able to accept it, their relationship souring because of it but I just couldn't do it haha.

Thanks again love!

I've finally gotten around to read this, and wow, I should have read it sooner

I felt a little bad for Matt, being neglected and denied and then having to listen to Brian going at himself downstairs, that'd be kind of devastating for the poor guy. At the same time, it probably isn't easy for Brian either, knowing that he's causing Matt to feel that way and knowing he can't do anything to change that. The ending was a good resolve. It'd be interesting to see where it'd go had Matt not been so accepting, had it destroyed their relationship. Would Brian be fine with it, or would he be crushed and eventually begin to resent her?

I'll tell you what I've told ZV, which I think has helped her a lot with how she works her sentences. Be careful of running them on too long. It's okay to have short sentences, to break it up. Running it on can get...I don't know, confusing? So just be mindful of that, if I'm making any sense at all haha. Other than that, I don't have any other CC to give. The start was great, the middle was emotionally awesome-poor Matt!!-and the ending was excellent. Happy endings abound!

To the sex, hello there When you told me the idea, besides being excited to see how you'd do it, I was kind of anxious to see how you do it xD How would you make it realistic, him fucking his guitar? You did a great job, frottage was the way to go and it worked really well. Matt being will to let Brian have her in bed with them is an added bonus :D

I really enjoyed this, well done on doing something no one else has done. And I look forward to seeing more epic work from you :D

That was totally AWESOME! And capturing! I loved it!

You sure have a way with words! :D

@ little dove
Thank you for your awesome comment! :D

Hey, I'm Brittany, here to judge for the Chains, Whip, and Fetishes - Oh My! Contest.

Wow.
I don't even know what to say. My mind is completely blown. Wow. The way you right is spectacular, everything felt so realistic and so very... mmph. Though, I have to give it to Brian, I don't think my body would never not react to Matt... I'm just saying. Anyway, the thought of Brian being so sexually attracted to his guitar to where she has to be in the "action" and just... wow. Damn, it's hot in here! I need... water or something, something to calm me down because this was such a very good story! You've definitely wrote about something I haven't read about before. I've heard of sexual imprinting (about a guy who was too into his car) but I thought that was odd, this was HOTT. Woo. Great job. I don't think I saw any mistakes, and then the layout is so smooth. 10/10. Seriously book marking for uh... future studies. What? Don't judge.

Have I talked about your descriptions? I'm kind of in rambles here because your story really blew me away. I love that you didn't repeat a lot of words, it felt very fresh. Also, I don't know why but I really loved the line, "too wrapped up in sensations and pleasure that course through his veins like hot molten lava." Perfect. Just pure perfection.

its weird because like i was picturing a time where brian moved his guitar and he had a bulge in his pants and then i read this story saying he has a sexual attraction to his guitar i was like wow this is really good and different t ype of story, i like it

Somewhat speechless!
I'm amazed by your writing and imagination.
I love Bratt and now Brian's baby too! lol
VERY HOT!

@ EzioAuditore
still love honig biene XD

Well, thanks to my computer completely freezing on me and not coming back to life for over 15 minutes, which caused me to just turn it off, I lost the comment I had written before. Excuse me if this is gonna be shorter, I'm pissed xD

First of all, I'm a little speechless and surprised at what your brilliant brain can fucking produce. Seriously, what the fuck, dude and how do you make it so perfect? This story had a way that just pulled you in because you created a somehow mysterious and intense atmosphere from the very beginning. The way you formed those sentences, fuck man, JUST HOW? It was perfect. I remember when I first heard about it from you I was so fucking confused and I still didn't have much of an idea what this was really about until I read it, and that had me hooked and really curious.
You presented this weird fetish perfectly. Though I must admit there's not a lot appearing odd to me about sexual preferences anymore, especially not in fictional aspects at all. So I wasn't weird out by this, but at the same time I didn't find it hot at all. The whole story I must admit, BUT I was interested. And I enjoyed reading it because the plot was perfect and the way you created this. The slow approach that led to finding out about what Brian's secret was so so intense, and it was so easy to understand how lost he felt in the situation. It just got deeper when you shows how Matt felt about it all. I felt a little bad for both of them, really. He just fucking missed him, and Brian couldn't just tell him. The little background infos you mentioned about the things Matt had noticed all this time were great. Important detail, I think, and placed perfectly fittingly and got everything a much more realistic meaning of what it all did to their relationship.
A bit drama is good! THough I was sad about their fight! And somehow relieved when Matt found out about Brian's dirty little secret. AND HOW FUCKING ADORABLE somehow of him to not get freaked out, but to..support his boyfriend, to show him it's okay and to play along. Fuuuuuuuuuck. Great relationship captured once again! With a very new and fresh tick to it, thanks to this unusual fetish! Great work, honig biene <3

this is just wow!!! I'm slightly speechless...I seriously loved it. I wish I could say more but I just dont know what to say except that I really liked it. Its a bit messed up but in the best way possible. Awesome!! Its nice that Matt is going to join in on the fun now and didn't leave him for his dirty little secret <3

OH MY FUCKING GOD!
This is just, fucking amazing. I can't.. I love how you paint a clear picture in your words. So much so that I can see Brian rutting up against his guitar and just fuck! I also loved how understanding Matt is in all of this!

THE SEX MAN!

Oh Christ. This is just one of the most hottest things I've read. So original, crumpet!

Holy fucking shit. That was probably the weirdest yet hottest thing I've ever read. I was able to picture the whole thing in my head; brian rubbing against his guitar, oh my!

...what if after bri performs, he has sex with his guitar? I mean he practically bangs it on stage. Now I think I'll just have that mental picture for the rest of my life.

But seriously, I loved it. It was great, hot, sweaty...
And that says a lot cause I'm usually not into slash.

OH MY GOODNESS!
That was....................OH MY GOODNESS!
I loved it!
:D