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@ January Rose
We're trying our best to fix all the gaps within the story, and we have big changes for it, it's just not the right time right now to fix any of it since me and my beta are super busy. We do have a plan for this story though, and it will be 100x better than the chapters you've read. Hope you stick around for the big change(which will hopefully happen in a couple of weeks or so depending on the work load we both get), but nonetheless, thank you for your feedback and stay for the upturn of the story!

@ January Rose
We're trying our best to fix all the gaps within the story, and we have big changes for it, it's just not the right time right now to fix any of it since me and my beta are super busy. We do have a plan for this story though, and it will be 100x better than the chapters you've read. Hope you stick around for the big change(which will hopefully happen in a couple of weeks or so depending on the work load we both get), but nonetheless, thank you for your feedback and stay for the upturn of the story!

I have been reading this story for the past half hour and I like it. But the story doesn't match up with the short summary at all. And the main character is confusing. At first she hates Jace, then she likes hom, the she hates him, then she likes Chris and then she cheats on him, accepting Jace back. What?
When I first started reading this I thought she and Jace would get into this abusive, weird relationship and then Chris would come and save her. Then you added Noah and Chris wasn't in the story for the longest time, so I was totally confused.
Don't get me wrong, I like this, but it doesn't reall make sense. I would change the short summary though, since the story doesn't really have anything to do with it.

@ squidgyyo
Yes! I will definitely coming back to this story once my Temptation is finished. As of right now we're still working on Temptation, but TMW will be back, new and improved!

are you ever gonna come back to this story? i like this story a lot

im still team chris, i just feel like jace only wants her because she was with chris.

cant wait for more

I look forward to finding out what happened between the two of them. I'm sure it's going to make one interesting story. :)

@ fallen_angel94

Don't worry, I will be continuing this story, but in the meantime I will be working on the piece about Leila and Noah to give you guys a background on both of them, as well as their history together as a couple, and then I will be coming back to this story!

I like this story but I like option A where it goes into the past so we an understand the present I can't wait to see what you do with this story

@ animestars

@ tragicvampire13

I love you guys, have I ever told you that? You guys are so supportive and I will no doubt follow up on your advice/opinions. As a writer I do feel like every time I read my stories they could always be improved.

But so far I have been leaning more towards Noah and Leilani's story, just because I feel like my readers don't exactly know about Noah, and to avoid doing flashbacks half the time! But we shall see! (:

I would love to see where this current story goes. I'm always anxious to get a post from you. However, no matter what you do, I will definitely be reading. :)

I know this isn't really going to help because I do this all the time by saying "both". I am really curious about her & Noah, so I'll stick to A). I don't think there's anything in the story/chapters that you need to tidy/fix up/or change. Stop leaving us stranded :P, we miss you !

@ feelingwild316
thank you so so much for your feedback! I'll consider it, well I mean I already am pushing more towards it, I just wanna hear more from my readers. (:

I'm kind of curious and Noah and her story so A :)

#TeamJace If they don't end up together, we're gonna have problems, Jay.

I get the feeling that Chris and Noah are going to team up to get Leilani. That is a scary thought. I can't wait to find out what really goes down. Keep posting!

This is such a brilliant feeling :') Chris was a sweet guy, but Jace and Leilani fit each other like a glove <3

Team Chris! xo

Team Jace!! Woo-hoo!! Update baby update!!

Shit that was good but at the sane time Leilani's up a creek