A Drop in the Ocean - Comments

I really like your story, and the summary was a big thing that got me to want to read this, awesome job on that, i did notice however that a few of the commas you use could be replaces with one of these ; (I forgot what there called; sorry XD) but here's and example: The tides were different; the people. that's how it should have looked not The tides were different. The people.

I have read the entire thing and its a really good story, I love your use of certain slang words refering to surfers, its very creative of you. Please submit the next chapter soon I really really really need to know what happens next! Subscribing now! :)

Seems like a very interesting story, and cannot wait to read more! I also love the way you used dialog and your layout.

@ aubree james.
Thanks so much! I appreciate the advice :)

So the layout and summary caught my attention for this story. It looks the layout is deeply related to the story. Being a sandy colour, yet not beachy, it's mostly just vintage and very pretty.

I like the idea of this story. It's sort of a classic, girl moves from home, meets boy, kind of thing I think? Except this story seems like it might pull something else off if the main character is as witty as you've portrayed.

One thing that I don't like in this story is the amount of telling, versus the amount of describing and showing. You need to balance that ratio. It's not really necessary to mention if a character went to the mall or whatever unless it's relevant to the story.

Either way, it's a good start to the story and I am excited to see what it becomes.

Great update really looking forward to the next one :)

@ wonderyear?
Thank you so much! More is coming soon :)

Very nice first chapter. Also beautiful layout. I'm curious to see what happens in the story. I'm subscribed.