I really like your story, and the summary was a big thing that got me to want to read this, awesome job on that, i did notice however that a few of the commas you use could be replaces with one of these ; (I forgot what there called; sorry XD) but here's and example: The tides were different; the people. that's how it should have looked not The tides were different. The people.
December 26th, 2013 at 11:00pm