Young Bodies - Comments

Chapter 3

Finn sounds like the typical character that everyone hates. But I love him actually. He sounds like the guy I would have a crush on.
This was an excellent chapter. I felt that everything new was brought up in the right time. I can't wait to see what the other super powers are. I'm curious to also find out if Olivia will develop some herself.

@ The Human Slayer
Thank you so much for this comment, it made me incredibly happy so thank you again! I'll fix that little typo right away. The next chapter will be out tomorrow, don't you worry about it!

Chapter One

I loved the first chapter! I felt like it was the perfect start to the story. It got me settled into everything, and I have a perfect picture of the main character and where she is from. I loved your attention to detail in this chapter.

Chapter Two

A lot of shit went down! I have so many questions that will only be answered in the next chapter!
I like how the drama was set up. The main characters jealousy was kind of cute when she saw the other girl with George.

One small mistake.
*health

Otherwise, great job!

Overall

I subscribed, and am looking forward to more!