Torment - Comments

This is very good! I agree with the comment about the spacing but other than that, everything looks to be coming together nicely. I feel this is a story people can relate to already. I'm excited to get to know the main character and see where life takes her. And you also have an excellent choice in wording. Keep up the good work! (:

Great description! You have some real talent as a writer. I would suggest laying it out a bit differently because it's a bit hard to read this way. Maybe some more spaces between the paragraphs? But the actual quality of the writing... WOW good job keep writing!!

@lilacpony thanks for your comment :) and I'm leading up to bigger things. And I made the chapters sour short because I didn't want to write a ton if no one was reading. But thank you it means a lot.

i can relate to this girl quite a bit, seeing that i have anxiety and stuff. i hope you update this soon, i really want to read more. this is so interesting. If i were you, I'd try to make the chapters longer and more descriptive!!! better choice of words as well. but other than that this was great. keep it up!!! :~)