July 11th, 2017 at 05:58am
can I suggest you edit your layout to put a dark background behind your text? I love the whole thing except that the content background makes the white writing a little hard to read. You have this whole 'Black Dahlia' feel to it.
Your imagery is incredible. I could almost feel her confidence in the beginning, "I'll be fine." And then her terror with each heartbeat. The person holding the knife was extremely creepy! I loved it. So, what else is going to happen next?
Well. This was a really good example of why I never wanted to move onto campus! But instead of it being because of horror stories told by my parents/grandparents, it was because I watched too much Criminal Minds. Same thing really though, let’s be honest. But because of that, this one-shot really messed with me and my fears a lot. It was actually horrifying to read the entire scene because I’m so terrified of that happening to me, even though the chances are slim. I can only imagine that adrenaline rush and the suffocating panic in the heat of the moment, but then that heart-shattering moment of fear and defeat and sorrow. It was such a petrifying thing to feel.
Your writing also really helped build up the scene because it was subtly detailed, painting the entire picture in my head with the ominous surroundings and the spine-chilling monster.
Even though it gave me a lowkey panic attack, I really enjoyed reading this so good job!