Filled With Syn - Comments

hot damn i wish I was one of those girls in those photos having brian be in leather with a whip HOT DAMNNNNN! I was really hoping brian was going to follow jamie

hot damn i wish I was one of those girls in those photos having brian be in leather with a whip HOT DAMNNNNN! I was really hoping brian was going to follow jamie

Hmm... Brian is a kinky motherfucker eh? I'm wondering if he cheated on Michelle.... I think that could be a strong yes. Lol
Jason and Jamie are really cute, but I wonder what's going to happen when Brian finds out. There just might be some jealous filled drama. Hehe.
Unfortunately I didn't get to slap him in this chapter. :(
Maybe I knocked some sense in to him. Lol

And Brian's kinky secrets are out!! I can't wait for the next update!

And Brian's kinky secrets are out!! I can't wait for the next update!

@ RockOut
Haha if you insist! I just might have to work on one.

I need an update right now!! Please!!!

I need an update right now!! Please!!!

well hell.. he almost fucked up so bad- well he did but managed to save the day.. phew!!
woah! sex toys! hahahah poor innocent jamie
heeellooooooo what's in the box??????????!!!!!!!!!

Only caught up on reading this now. I don't normally check out avenged stories, but I'm so glad I started reading this. Love the story, and Jamie is just awesome. Now I'm just dying to find out what's in the box!

Christ on a bike!!! What an ending!! I can't wait to read more of this! Please update again soon. Xxx

....*Stares*.... WHAT THE FLYING FUCK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!????????????????? you best be lettin' me in on this mystery box... and SOON!!!!!!!!

Love ya Babe

@ StacieIerogeance
Lmao! You crack me up haha. Box it up and burn it.

I WANNA KNOW WHATS IN THE BOTTOM OF THE SHOE BOX! And eww Michelle's stuff gross you don't tape it up and pack it away you throw that shit away lol.

I WANNA KNOW WHATS IN THE BOTTOM OF THE SHOE BOX! And eww Michelle's stuff gross you don't tape it up and pack it away you throw that shit away lol.

@ signoralala
Haha yay! I loved your comment! I totally pictured you as Jamie dumping the paint on his head bahaha! That would be epic. Sigh. Is it wrong the thought of Syn covered in paint is still sexy? Thanks for the feedback. I'll have to update it again soon!

Ooh, so badly girl. By the time he went off about her supposedly wanting to sleep with a plethora of guys, I had already mentally slapped him like 20 times!! I also love that Jamie slapped him, whamo, tag-teaming it! <dirty , and not ashamed > Haha
I honestly would've taken that paint tray and emptied the contents of it over his pretty little head. Lol

The box... hmm.. my dirty mind can think up some pretty interesting things.
It could be sexy lingerie... for Brian. Pink, frilly tu-tu ballerina, fairy princess shit. With a wand! Haha (Okay, I'm still angry with Brian).

There are so many possibilities... Oh. My. God. What if he like has a secret obsession with Jamie? Like, pictures of her?

Hm.. I might be really soaring outside of the box there. Lol I will have to wait and see. :)

@ RoCk_PrInCeSs_PR
Omg! Thank you so much for that comment. I'm glad my vivid imagery and description comes across well and how I aimed for it to. I really love their story. I kind of pride myself on trying to write the guys in the band how their everyday life might be, ya know?

I don't mean to use their names so much like in overall content. I purposely do it in their dialogue and when they speak to each other though because in the state I'm from, we address people by their names A LOT when speaking to them. It makes the conversation more personal in a sense. Overall though I could tone using their names down when describing them.

I just got into the habit of doing it because I've read stories that were down right confusing when there were several characters at once being talked about and the authors like NEVER used their names. They just said, "He said. She went." Like all the time for every character. I always have a fear of confusing readers so I do over specify things I think!

Thanks for being honest with me, though. I enjoy that you gave me some constructive criticism in a manner that wasn't rude like so many users do here. You're awesome.

I really love this. First off I love Jamie’s relationship with her brother Jimmy. They are sweet and just very funny siblings. I love how you managed to describe in detail their emotions and feelings when they are simply thinking it out loud. You used a lot of vivid images which helps the reader get into the story more and more.

My favorite part so far is the part in which Jamie is getting off the shower and Brian sees her topless. The response that Jamie gives her had me cracking up in laughter and proudness because that’s the honest truth. They are just boobs. I yelled “Oh Dear!” when I read the part in which Jamie tells Brian if he wanted to play with them. Hahaha that was just brilliant.

After Jamie gives Brian a BJ in chapter 12, I felt a knot on my throat. He shouldn’t have said those things and called her stupid at that, but we usually say things we regret later on when we are mad.
It was wrong but I understood that he was shock and angry. I loved that part because you managed to make me feel how hurt she was by describing it with specific details. This is very well written.
One thing that I noticed though is that you use their names too often. Reminding the audience is good, but using their names every five seconds, gets a little uncomfortable. You can use 'he' 'him' 'she' 'her' etc. No one is going to hate you on that, it gives it a space rather than repeating their names all the time, otherwise, I love this. You are doing an amazing job and can’t wait to see where this goes.

xoxo, RP

hahahahaha drunk brian!!!!!!!! I loved it hahaha i pictured that whole thing in my head even the part where he was naked on the floor and val is like oh my god and stuff like that...can't wait until the next chapter