Terrible Things - Comments

I don't know how I'm going to make the two hundred words. I had a feeling, just from the summary, that this was going to make me cry and you succeeded. And I always struggle to convey what exactly I'm feeling with pieces like this because it strikes me in a way that feel indescribable, y'know? I guess my emotion does come from personal experiences as well, but that doesn't take away from your ability to provoke reactions like this from your readers with how you describe Scotty's feelings and how everyone else is also dealing with it.

There's only two chapters and it would have been just as affected as one long oneshot, but you've written enough within those two chapters to bring out the same feelings I would have had if this had focused on a bit before TJ died and the subsequent aftermath of it. Everyone handles death differently but even those who don't publically show how much it has affected them can relate to how Scotty's feeling, how he's now all alone without TJ with him and how he has to somehow live and continue on despite there being a huge, gaping hole left by TJ's death.

It was wrong of TJ's mother to ban Scotty from the funeral. He could have just passed as a close friend mourning his death, but instead she was, honestly, selfish and not wanting people to know about who her son was to allow his memory to finally rest in peace, truthfully.

I'm not even going to blame my tears on the time because it's only half one in the morning and that's nowhere near late enough to warrant any excuse about being tired that's making me cry. You have a knack of being able to write a sad piece that is not only conveyed perfectly, but that also goes that extra step of making those that read it cry because of that sadness. This was lovely to read.

I don't know if it's because I haven't spelt because it's 6.01 AM and I've been unable to sleep or because this story is sad, but I started to cry ; ( I loved it though, the idea for the video was really great.

@ The Human Slayer
Wow thank you for the comment Also I'll fix that right away. Thanks for pointing it out to me. I'm glad you liked T.J. even though he didn't really have much screen time. I guess I'm doing something right.

Very well done! You can really feel the emotion in the story.

'How dare she?['
^That was more of a statement then a question. So either a period or exclamation point at the end of that sentence perhaps.

I wish TJ was alive, because he is actually my favorite character!

@ LoveForGiraffes
It's all good. I completely understand how busy life can get. Thank you for your comment.

So wow. I'm so terribly sorry it has taken me a year and a half to read this beautiful work of yours. I can literally feel Scotty's pain it's crazy. The way that you wrote this gave me chills, especially the 'I need more time with you' 'there is no more time' lines, totally wrecked my heart. This was truly amazing, I'm so glad you entered my contest dear. Great job

Wow. Your way of telling a story is so powerful. I thought I had mastered the art of staying unemotional while reading this type of thing but I must admit I did shed a tear. I got so attached to the story so quickly and thought it was brilliant. Amazing job :)

@ VivaLaJack-O-Lantern
thank you a lot

Wow. This was simply amazing. Such a powerful piece of writing. As a reader, I could almost feel the pain that Scotty was in. This was brilliantly sad.

@ Ace Lightning.
thank you darling

this was so so lovely but so so sad

@ Anne Ashes
That was the plan. Wow. Thank you for liking it and commenting. Sorry I made you cry. And sorry to hear about your grandma *virtual hug*

I. am. crying. so. hard. right. now. My grandma died because of cancer too and I know how Scotty feels,the way you wrote it... oh god,I don't have words to describe my feelings.