I'm here to take this drabble's comment virginity.
The first thing I saw was the layout which is absolutely nice and it gives off a sad vibe matching the story's title. I don't know yet how the banner ties with the story but I'll find out as I read.
On to the summary, it honestly gives me the chills. It gives off the feeling of dying slowly but we'll see if I'm right.
I don't think I've ever felt anything like this before, it was a warm a second ago but now it's cold all over my body. The a warm should be just warm.
On to the chapter itself, I don't know when it started, maybe it never started it just happened. I think it would flow better if it was like this, I don't know when it started, and maybe it never started... it just happened.
The narrator feels colder and colder as the time goes by while waiting for someone and that person has started to forget for who she/he was waiting for. The narrator has no feel of the time and is not sure about where she/he is, her/his condition or who she/he is anymore. And then there's the narrator's plea for help which add a very realistic tone to the story as well as the use of the present tense. And the reason the narrator is there is because of that note. It gives off the feeling that either someone else did that to the narrator or the mnysterious R.
I'm here to take this drabble's comment virginity.
The first thing I saw was the layout which is absolutely nice and it gives off a sad vibe matching the story's title. I don't know yet how the banner ties with the story but I'll find out as I read.
On to the summary,
it honestly gives me the chills. It gives off the feeling of dying slowly but we'll see if I'm right.
I don't think I've ever felt anything like this before, it was a warm a second ago but now it's cold all over my body. The a warm should be just warm.
On to the chapter itself,
I don't know when it started, maybe it never started it just happened. I think it would flow better if it was like this, I don't know when it started, and maybe it never started... it just happened.
The narrator feels colder and colder as the time goes by while waiting for someone and that person has started to forget for who she/he was waiting for. The narrator has no feel of the time and is not sure about where she/he is, her/his condition or who she/he is anymore. And then there's the narrator's plea for help which add a very realistic tone to the story as well as the use of the present tense. And the reason the narrator is there is because of that note. It gives off the feeling that either someone else did that to the narrator or the mnysterious R.
It was a nice drabble. Thanks for sharing it.
~Marian.