Lips of Deceit - Comments

Holy shit didnt see that one haha that was wicked

Wasn't expecting that..XD



Like I told you, I was expecting for the dreams to become real once they got it on, but I wasn't expecting the pregnancy or that Matt's mother was involved somehow. Holy shit! The lineage, Matt being his mate? WOAH. I like how it was a ritual that was complete once they bumped hips and not just some magic that happened. Not that the magic didn't happen in Matty's bedroom though

I loved it! :D Definitely worth the wait! But I'm sad that it's ended now. Get to work on those one-shots woman! Mush!

oh wow that was amazingly good and quite a twist at the end

That was amazingly wow!! I can't believe its over. I could read more, it was that good! Fantastic writing!!

You should update this, it's really good. :)

this is a good story so far it's kinda creepy in a way like the secret kim had i wonder what it was and the nightmares my goodness

Holy shit, those nightmares! I have a feeling that the dreams are going to become real, just a thought..

Matt is so going to tap that ass soon, there's only so long he can resist! Ohhh, *light bulb moment* I guess if/when he does finally succumb, that shit will go down and those dreams will come true?

More soon please :D

I really like this so far, my mind is clouded with so many questions already! XD I thought it was so cute how Matt took to Zacky instantly, little baby Zack playing grabby hands with Matty

Oh, hello overly brotherly bond nice to see you popping up hehe. I want to know what Zacky is! What did Matt's mum find out when he was left on their doorstep, the look she his from the others when she picked him up, it's bugging me

What's going on with Matt too, for him to wake up with blood on him and exhausted, I have a few thoughts.. Sorry I'm thinking out loud again haha.

Looking forward to more :D

First off, you are most welcome

To the content comment haha.

I'll start with the con-crit. In some places, you switch tenses, it's not glaringly obvious, but can be picked up. Some sentences don't make sense, I think it's just a simple case of them running on too long, or like I myself do sometimes, you just don't know where to go or don't pick up on it yourself. A quick edit should fix that up though.

Onwards.

I wasn't expecting so much of it so soon! I'm getting the feeling this might be a short story? Not that there's anything wrong with that XD I'm liking how this started, instant enchantment between them And now Matt's in a situation he doesn't understand and isn't sure if he wants to be in. Le drama. Matt, you are in over your head haha.

Keep it going dude!!! I look forward to more :D