For Fair Love - Comments

This seems really interesting so far! Don't take this the wrong way, but it's really obvious that you aren't from the UK, because a lot of the british slang you have used is wrong. Noone ever says 'chaps' regardless of whether they are from Bradford (like me), or if they are posh and from London. Likewise, things don't often get referred to as bonkers - particularly in that context - it's usually more to do with an event - for example "Thanks for such a great concert! That was bonkers!"

I like the fact that you tried though!

Also, at this point so early on in the story, I'm not sure where Chastity is from in order to get the weird accent, but Bradford is in a county called Yorkshire, which is pretty damn north, so it would make more sense to pick a city with quite a northern accent i.e. Newcastle, and mention that instead. By saying she's from the north, but to a clearly northern lad herself, you're beginning to throw in a few potholes. But don't worry, they can be easily solved, and I can help you if you want!

I like Chayn. Please update more often (:

Go Harry! I like Harry and Chas I think they will be cute together once they open to to each other! I'm so excited for the next chapter!

awwwww this is just to cutee <3 I'm subcribing, just read the 20 chapters in a row haha, but please write more soon, I wanna keep reading....I wish something would happen with her and Harry too <3

Okay so I've officially read it all, definitely team Charry!

I am sooo team Charry, Zayne has a girlfriend anyway, and I haven't even finished reading it yet I just had to say team Charry haha. XD

Ouch! Chas 's last comment was pretty harsh. I don't think Harry's taking advantage, but it seems like Karen definitely is and I want to know why. Update soon!

It's an intriguing beginning. Update soon!