The Mundane - Comments

Love it.

Hello, I'm a judge for the magazine's "Season of Change" contest!

This certainly struck something with me because of personal matters that happened earlier this year, but you can just feel the emotion from the first paragraph because it just seeps out with hopelessness. It's brilliant. I like how the anger is so sharp with the words that are written that you can just feel the anger seep into your mind as you're reading and that it just infects you as well, especially when it comes to Lizzie. The way that the protagonist describes her makes it extremely clear as to just how much emotion she is feeling at that moment in time following the event that happened.

I kind of saw the ending coming but even so, it was fantastic. The abrupt change to the protagonist's life is clear in the words and it feels like it's prompting self-help, which is brilliant all-round. I honestly liked this quite a bit, a part of me because it struck as vaguely familiar but also because the way it's written and how it's made me feel while reading. Your writing is just absolutely blood grand.

I love the entirety of this and think you did a really great job with incorporating the theme of the contest in this entry. So bravo.

@ psychotic secrets;
Thank you!

I'm a judge for Mibba Magazine's "Season of Change" Contest. This story really is a great example of change in someone's life. It changed how the protagonist thought and how the death of a loved one can change someone's life so dramatically. The tone of this piece is so powerful. I could feel the anger, the sadness and then the calmness that this expressed. Not to mention how absolutely detailed and just magnificent this is. I adored how you explained Lizzy. You built to her character in just a few sentences. Then, the way the protagonist was described makes me almost speechless. Everything that could be done to make a story great happened. The perfect amount of information with the perfect amount of dialogue. The ending I was quite surprised with. I didn't expect the protagonist to get help and actually be helped. My thoughts were in more darker places. I think the ending was a nice change the character made. It's something I hope readers understand and can actually help themselves. Great job, like you did a really good job.