Witness - Comments

Wow. This story is so good. All I want is to read more. It makes me so sad that this story is over. I think it would be really cool to see a sequel. After all they have both been through quite the ordeal. I would love to see how they handle it. Especially Harry. With all the media. And just the way people are going to react.

Ah I found it again!!!! Yay :) glad to finally see how it all panned out :)

I finally caught up and read the last chapters of this amazing story. All I have to sa is WOW! Amazing finish and I loved all the drama and action in each chapter. The detail poured into the story is great and really paints a clear image into the reader's head. I feel bad that Mara and Harry are going to be haunted by this forever, but am glad that they are repairing themselves and looking towards the furture.
Fantastic job on this story, I absolutly loved it!

You are i n c r e d i b l e .
I'm so happy to have found another talent 1D fanfiction writer. They're far and few between, even with the hoards of Directioners trying their hand at it.

[off to check for other stories by you and obsess over you]

okay, bye!

Catherine

our girl mara is amazing
CANT WAIT FOR THE FLUFFYNESS W/ HARRY

So I've spent the past few days reading this story, and it was just so amazing I loved it! It was perfect, Mara was such a believable heroine and I loved her and Harry's relationship. It was just so perfect and exciting, I was practically jumping reading those last few chapters. And then you ended it so well, with all the characters, and a very nice happy but not fairy tale ending. And those twists caught me so much by surprise, the family angle was done really nicely.

I'm so sorry for the glitch, this story deserves so much more recognition.

I just loved it.

I might have squealed when I got the email that said this was update haha. I'm just now getting a chance to read it though.

I just want to give Mara a big hug
Aww, Hector is so sweet.
Oreos. Now, I really want some Oreos haha.
Harry's smile. Boy could light up the whole of NYC (I was going to say London, but I've never been there, so).
Mara talking about her new family, aww.
I'm ready and not ready to say goodbye to this, at the same time.
You're a brilliant writer and I'm glad I found your stories, 'cause we also became friends from me reading and commenting!

I just want to take a moment to commend you on the genius that is this story. I have truly fallen in love with Harry and Mara's story, and I really wish it wasn't over. I love that you made this story so realistic. She was never truly fearless, and yet, she was never immobilizingly scared. It was all so real. Fantastic job. I can't wait to read other stories from you. (:

WAAAHH
i forgot to keep reading
sorry
whoopsies
I'M ON IT~

I haven't made a comment in 5eva so here ya good my cupcake

I NEED TO KNOW IF HARRY IS OKAY
OKAY?????
my bby love needs to be alright or i will throw a cow at Damien (if he was still alive)
oh i will not hesitant to do so
MARA BBY IS TOO STRONG
okay whhhhy do you do this to me
i need to understand that is is just a story
YET I FEEL SO ATTACHED (i sound so scary hahahha)
UGHHHHH
okay i'm controlled now
harry okay i love you
HE'S SO PERFECT
and so sweet
mara is so lucky
Harry omg
so glad harry's alright!
I NEED HIM BREATHING
she feels so guilty but she did the right thing!
DAMIEN WAS A NO NO
bad boi
OMG HARRY SO CUTE
'move in with me'
I VOLUNTEER
so cute

omg scones
SCONES OH MY GOSH
LITTLE LO
u kno haz is srs when he breaks out scones oh man
(sorry I just like scones idk)
omg haz cares
HE CARES
LITLE LO HE REALLY WANTS TO BE YOUR FRIEND AAAAAAAW yay
is this a date
IS IT A DATE IS IT IS ITTTT
omg they're going to manchester
WOW PULLIN' OUT ALL THE STOPS HUH
ooooh
for business
YOU MEAN DICKIN' ABOUT WITH THE BOYS
are the boys even in this story
are they omg
NIALLLL PLS LET HIM omg omg omg omg u don't understand ily niall ok ok moving on
miss lilia
oooooooh
HE'S STEPPIN' HIS GAME UP
what am I supposed to do without haz for a week
dang little lo
omg THEY'RE FRIENDS SHE SAID THEY'RE FRIENDS YAYAYYYY
omg ur job sux
BUT SHE WANTS TO WRITE SCREEN PLAYS AWWWWWW
omg omg omg
I went to NYU last year for a tour and ugh it's beautiful poor little lo
omg the whole town is talkin' about lil lo huh
IT'S CAUSE SHES A BABE
omg little lo be positive ok
OH NO
OH MAN
LIL LO U IN TROUBLE
IT'S HAZ
IT'S HIM
OH MAN
oh damn oh shooot
snap crackle
DON'T PANIC
u in so much trouble
havin' an adventure
GIRL PLS
u not foolin' no body
le sob

wow little lo way to be anti-social
girl
HOW ARE YOU GONNA CONQUER HAZ IF YOU DON'T LEAVE THE HOUSE
omg
HOW CAN YOU SURVIVE ON VENDING MACHINE FOOD
are you crazy
HAVE YOU LOST YOUR MIND
little lo I expected more out of u
OMG LITTLE LO
it's ok
once when I was younger the painters came to paint my apartment and I had no idea they were coming so when they did I freaked out and like hid in my room wooo
it's ok little lo but still
u need to get at harry
'cause if u don't
I WILL
omg u a runner
IS THAT BOTH LITERAL AND FIGURATIVE
or just literal
ok
omg haz
U ALREADY AFTER LIL LO HUH
oooooooh
u better have food
or else mister
omg stop thinking about von creep
u got haz to deal with omg girl
GIRL THANK GOODNESS U FRESHENED UP
omg little lo
he likes ur name
oooooooooh
~someone has a crush eh~
U GETTIN' SNARKY WITH LITTLE LO HAZ
R U
'cause i will wreck u m8
i will punch u in the mouth
with my mouth or something idk
omg haz
lighting fast
WOW u crazy bout little lo huh haz
stop thinking about von creep
AND THE OTHER VON CREEP AKA THOMAS
aka mini von creep
to differentiate and stuff
oh little lo
u n i both kno u wonderin' what he's got underneath them sweats don't deny it

what's Indian Paintbrush?
i'm just going to guess it's a flower ok movin' on
I AM A MAN OF MANY TALENTS
yeah like ruining my life for starters with your stupid dimples u qt
omg fish n chips
luv is in the air guise
not when I'm developing such a good reason to stay
ARE MY FEELINGS A JOKE TO YOU HAZ
HUH
HOW CAN YOU JUST SAY THAT
OH JEEZ
OH MAN
HERE COME THE CHEST PAINS
all the feels
um cryin'
le tears
of u kno
happiness and stuff 'cause little lo & litle haz best be endgame
i'm going to continue with chapter three and four and so on later tomorrow ok ok bye

I don't want it to end :(

OKAY OKAY OKAY
chapter one officially
here I go
~preparing for the feels bc wow ur writing makes mine look awful u feel me
lilia
no
ur name is lilo now sorry gonna refer to you as lilo from now on ok babe
hardly a man
IS IT HAZ
IS IT
sorry ok I'm really jumpy and I've had lots of 1d feels today idk
ok so it's not haz
or is it?
AIR MARSHAL
WHAT AM I SUPPOSED TO DO WITH THAT
WHAT DO AIR MARSHALS EVEN DO
disgruntled ugh
ok so u don't even kno wut an air marshal is cute boy
WHO ARE YOU
WHAT HAVE YOU DONE
ARE YOU HAZ
hrumph
no lilo no
YOU GOTTA LET THE PAST GO LITTLE LO
omg yes
calling her little lo now sorry I have a thing for nicknames oh well
omg little lo just wants to sleep
GO AWAY CREEPY CUTE BOY THAT MAY OR MAY NOT BE HARRY GOSH LEAAAAAVE
unless ur haz
in which case pls stay
talking too much aw omg
WHAT A CUTIE I CAN'T EVEN BE MAD
ugh I hope they're friends or something idk
so can I just take a moment to talk about your way with words and how eloquent and amazing you make everything sound?
I'm from New York City (WOOOOOT) and ugh I love it so much and you describe it perfectly in her dream that's interrupted by that creepy little creep
von creep
yep that's his name
casually renames the whole cast to suit their personalities brb
omg omg omg
she's sleeping on the cute boy
OH MY GOSH
IS IT HAZ
pls let it be haz pls
omg PLEEEEAAASE
if it's not I'm going to be really disappointed for the rest of the story tbh
BLESS
PRAISE THE LORD
IT'S HARRY
UGH
come here u lil cutie pie ugh
LITTLE LO & HAZ
it's already decided
they're endgame
nope
IF THEY'RE NOT WATCH I SWEAR I'MMA START CRYIN'
u don't wanna see these waterworks ok bro
I found you quite lovely
ok haz u just bought urself a one way ticket into my heart YOU'RE WELCOME BUB
oeo
sounds like a sound they make in autotune songs
OKAY SORRY SORRY I'LL PAY ATTENTION TO THE STORY
focuses
holmes chapel
that sounds fancy
omg
IS IT LIKE A SPOOKY MANOR WITH A CUTE LIL BUTLER AND GRUMPY COOK
pls let it be a spooky manor ugh YES
a small town
ok
well
it's still cute I GUESS
disappointed le sob
she's a bartender
A BAR TENDER
WOAH
is that how she meets haz again
IS IT
of course I'm completely disregarding the summary and prologue cause I can't think about little haz gettin' shot ok it's traumatic and so on
ok little lo
if people are mean to you in holmes chapel
JUST GIVE THEM CRAPPY DRINKS OK
omg stucco cottages
STUCCO
ugh it's rustic
I LOVE IT
yes this is perfect
this is excellent
me gusta mmhm
OH MY GOSH
HARRY LIVES THERE
HARRY LIVES ACROSS THE STREET
PRAISE
oh man oh man
LITTLE LO GO BAKE A PIE
BE NEIGHBORLY
INTRODUCE YOURSELF
BE SUBTLE
ugh le sobbin'
ON TO CHAPTER TWO
sniffles wow this is amazing

Sorry, it's taken me a bit to read this! I went to the Fair yesterday and got home late!

Poor Mara
“Can I please just see my boyfriend?” I asked in a near whisper.
I can't imagine the emotional trauma you'd go through after having to kill somebody.
Harry got shot in the heart
“You’re important to me,” he explained softly, reaching to run his thumb gingerly across my cheek. “I would be devastated without you. I want to be able to tell you I love you whenever I want. I want you all day, every day, for as long as we can.”
I loved that chapter! I can't wait for the next chapter! Even though I'm bummed that this story is ending!

Ugh, I love this so much.
Incredible job, really <3
So sad this only has one more chapter left!

So, I stayed up all night and read this. Kind of mad about staying up but not really because the story is A+.

So I know I tell you all the time that you're awesome and stuff but I hadn't ever really taken more than a passing glance at this before and tonight for some reason I decided I'd read it and now I'm really angry that I hadn't read it before because um WOWWWWWW?????!?!!?!!
And I only read the first chapter and I'm on my phone but I'll be reading the rest of it throughout the day and commenting withy feels and thoughts and so on, okay?
so I mean for chapter one/prologue
um ok first I'm already scared bc warehouses are scary and weird and every guy I've ever known with that Damien name has been weird and creepy so wow omg
but haz
hAZZA
he just is all like qrl we gon get thru dis u feel me
and Mara is just like
~excusez-moi while I recollect on our ill timed love affair brb
and the crazy guy is laughing crazily
OH SNAP CRACKLE POP
literal pop
hazza's down
I REPEAT
hazza is down
NOOOOOO
HOW COULD YOU LET THIS HAPPEN MARA
this is exactly why we can't have nice things tbh
but UM YEAH
in summation this story gets an a++++
and ur already on my rec list so yeah wow this story is really amazing so far omg
HERE I GO TO TACKLE THE REST OF THESE CHAPTERS EH
~cracks knuckles

AW! That was just too perfect for words! 10/10! Haha. :)

Just found this story for the first time and I am absolutely in love.