Just off reading the first chapter, I can safely say that this is most definitely one of the better Frerard's out there. I like how you've portrayed the relationships within the family. I'm not a big fan of Frerard if I'm being brutally honest, mainly because most of it is so utterly dire but this is a different kettle of fish; I have really enjoyed this first chapter. I hope it carries on bein brilliant
You story is really good so far. The only advice I may give is I notice Gee gets referred to as a girl in some instances and other instances instead of Frank, Adam is written.
September 25th, 2013 at 06:39pm
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