The Hunters and the Hunted - Comments

Happy two month late mibbaween! I apologize for my tardiness.

This is an interesting plot. It's well written. The dialogue can sometimes get confusing though. I had trouble following it. Additionally, I also had trouble getting into the story. It's probably because ruthless killing really isn't my thing-- it takes out all of the element of surprise because the reader knows how the main character is going to feel about killing. Maybe ruthless isn't the correct adjective, apathetic killing is a better way to communicate it. Apathetic killing makes the story predictable.

Anyways, it is rather interesting, but the archetypal supernatural being characteristics in your character are mildly annoying. Most likely, it is just my taste.

I like the flow of consciousness you have. It actually builds on your characterization. I can tell the hunter is the invincible type, and he knows this piece of information as well.

Overall, it is a good story, and I will recc it because of the quality. Keep up the good work and happy mibbaween!

@ hephaestus
Welcome!

@ Unnatural Angel
Thank you!

OMG this is friggin awesome! It's well written, your description is awesome and the way you can hold your readers with the words you use is just amazing! good job!

I just finished reading all of the chapters and can't wait to continuing reading this story, it's just so well written. I didn't find any mistakes and your descriptive language is really well developed. You have a great flow with all your sentences and, yeah this was just a great read :)

morreeeeee pleaseeeee its so amazing

I really like this, I love vampire stories! I love how you said "moseyed down the bar" the word moseyed isn't used enough! :-) very dark!!! I like it! Please update soon xxx