This is heart-wrenching and beautiful. Your writing is beautifully poetic and really makes everything flow in such a gorgeous manner, and already both Patrick and Jaime are enchanting characters and their chemistry is wonderful. Amazing job with this, and I can't wait to read more :)
This is just... spectacular. I really think you could write anything and I would just... ngf. Flail. And be in awe. And want to absolutely cry because I will never write as emotionally as this, even when it's just your imagery that is emotional. Just... wow.