Shout the Call - Comments

Braddington:

I'm finally up to date again, and it's nice to come back to a flood of updates. Poor Bae; I feel sympathy for her, and I'm interested what challenges she'll have to face, now she's changed.

I really liked the end of chapter 21 (might have been 20) with this passage "Then I felt a deep-seated sense of pure, physical hunger. I was ravenous, almost nauseous with it...", the rest of the paragraph and the one after really puts you in the mind of Bae, and it finishes the chapter on a a bit of a hanger.

You know what I say; keep updating. It's lovely to see and keep seeing other people write.

Thank you so much for reading honey. As always I cannot begin to tell you how much it means to me.

I'm finally up to date again, and it's nice to come back to a flood of updates. Poor Bae; I feel sympathy for her, and I'm interested what challenges she'll have to face, now she's changed.

I really liked the end of chapter 21 (might have been 20) with this passage "Then I felt a deep-seated sense of pure, physical hunger. I was ravenous, almost nauseous with it...", the rest of the paragraph and the one after really puts you in the mind of Bae, and it finishes the chapter on a a bit of a hanger.

You know what I say; keep updating. It's lovely to see and keep seeing other people write.

Braddington:

Ah, at last it's nice to see some insight and learn about Aaron's background, the band, and the different dynamics between the characters. It's interesting that Bea, however indirectly, is actually the root of the conflict here (even though it's not her fault ) and not for the reasons I expected. I really thought Jack was going to persue Bea, so his old feelings over Aaron are a pleasant twist. As always, keep it up! I'm currently battling a pretty bad case of writer's block, so reading other people's work is both refreshing and helpful for me.

Once again, what would I do without your feedback honey? I seriously only update STC because I know you will read and give feedback accordingly. Thank you so much for sticking with it and I'm sure the writer's block will soon disappear.

Mwah xxx

Ah, at last it's nice to see some insight and learn about Aaron's background, the band, and the different dynamics between the characters. It's interesting that Bea, however indirectly, is actually the root of the conflict here (even though it's not her fault ) and not for the reasons I expected. I really thought Jack was going to persue Bea, so his old feelings over Aaron are a pleasant twist. As always, keep it up! I'm currently battling a pretty bad case of writer's block, so reading other people's work is both refreshing and helpful for me.

Braddington:

I'm all caught up at last.
I knew something was a little bit 'off' about the band but I certainly didn't see the upcoming twist. Eager to read on as always, keep all us Mibbians updated :) I'm interested where all this will lead.

"I could hear the words coming from his perfect mouth but couldn't absorb them"- for some reason I really liked this line in particular.

Once again honey, thank you so much for your feedback and yes, I love that line too. Thank you for always reading and leaving feedback. It really means a lot!

I'm all caught up at last.
I knew something was a little bit 'off' about the band but I certainly didn't see the upcoming twist. Eager to read on as always, keep all us Mibbians updated :) I'm interested where all this will lead.

"I could hear the words coming from his perfect mouth but couldn't absorb them"- for some reason I really liked this line in particular.

Braddington:

After a brief Mibba absense, I'm finally up to date again and I feel I've been missing out. The newly introduced conflict makes me want to read more, it really does, and the last chapter is peaking with tension. You've dropped in a mystery there, and I'm left wondering. As always, please keep up the hard work :D

Once again honey, thank you so much for the feedback. I truly appreciate it! I'm just reading through the first draft now and I'm up to chapter 35. It reads really well. Can't wait to get it all typed up and published now!

After a brief Mibba absense, I'm finally up to date again and I feel I've been missing out. The newly introduced conflict makes me want to read more, it really does, and the last chapter is peaking with tension. You've dropped in a mystery there, and I'm left wondering. As always, please keep up the hard work :D

Braddington:

Once again, great to see another chapter :D I'm still left with this feeling that things are going to take a bad turn. I'm still worried for Bea.

Personally I'd upload more chapters but not all at once, purely to receive more feedback and reads off people. However, I do enjoy being teased with installments, so there's no rush ;)

Keep up the work x

Hey honey. Thank you for the feedback, as always. Yes, my strong female characters always have a vulnerability to them and generally, something will always go amiss but all I can say is just keep reading.

I take on board your thoughts about what and how often I should post. To be honest, that's what I was thinking of doing myself but I wanted to get an idea of what people, particularly you, would this about it.

I hope you're well honey and hope 2014 is treating you well so far.

Lots of love

Lucy

Once again, great to see another chapter :D I'm still left with this feeling that things are going to take a bad turn. I'm still worried for Bea.

Personally I'd upload more chapters but not all at once, purely to receive more feedback and reads off people. However, I do enjoy being teased with installments, so there's no rush ;)

Keep up the work x

Braddington:

Yesss, another chapter! You keep up a good pace despite this chapter being mostly dialogue. Every sentence between the characters has a point. You do a good job of portraying Bea in a slightly vulnerable night. I'm reading, all the while fretting for her safety. Keep this lovely updates up, I'm intruiged :D

Love the last line x

Awwww, thank you sweetheart. I'm really thrilled with this comment. As you already know, I do tend to focus a lot on dialogue. Conversations and writing them; well, that's what makes me tick. I love descriptive work too but my thing is definitely dialogue. I'm so glad you're still enjoying it because I can't tell you how much I'm thoroughly enjoying it. There's quite a few twists and turns throughout and the story is evolving/changing every time I write a new chapter. It really is exciting for me at the moment. I'm just about to finish chapter 24. I'll try and get more up soon.

Thank you again honey

Yesss, another chapter! You keep up a good pace despite this chapter being mostly dialogue. Every sentence between the characters has a point. You do a good job of portraying Bea in a slightly vulnerable night. I'm reading, all the while fretting for her safety. Keep this lovely updates up, I'm intruiged :D

Love the last line x

Braddington:

Ah, another update! There's a lot of intrigue here and the second chapter still leaves you with the impression something's not quite right. Bea's opportunity seems all a little bit too good to be true. Eager for more updates as always, and thank you ever so much for the shout out :) x

And generally, if it seems to good to be true it probably is. That's all I'm going to say! Ha ha. The shout out to you is more than deserved honey. You're a star!

Ah, another update! There's a lot of intrigue here and the second chapter still leaves you with the impression something's not quite right. Bea's opportunity seems all a little bit too good to be true. Eager for more updates as always, and thank you ever so much for the shout out :) x

popular mechanics.:

Helloooo there, it's me! Love this first chapter. Your use of perspective is very engaging, especially the stream of consciousness aspect of it all. It really draws the reader into the story. Definitely keep it up!

Thank you so much! I really appreciate the reference to "stream of consciousness". That's exactly what I aim for. I like how us writers/story tellers can make even the most mundane seem interesting and at times exciting. Thank you so much for your feedback it is very much appreciated

Helloooo there, it's me! Love this first chapter. Your use of perspective is very engaging, especially the stream of consciousness aspect of it all. It really draws the reader into the story. Definitely keep it up!

Braddington:

Glad to see you're back and writing! Well, I'm intrigued as to where all this could lead. Right from the start we're happy for Bea, but something doesn't seem quite right. Keep it up :)

Wooohooooo, you've popped the comment cherry my sweet. Thank you so much. I'll be updating soon. Mwah xx

Glad to see you're back and writing! Well, I'm intrigued as to where all this could lead. Right from the start we're happy for Bea, but something doesn't seem quite right. Keep it up :)