Just Another Love Story - Comments

I can't say I know very much about this fandom, so I'm going in blind, but I'm sure it's going to be awesome nonetheless.
I'm enjoying what I'm reading so far- the relationship between the characters is so realistic and refreshing to read, the dialogue spins much like ordinary speech rather than written (which is so hard to do!) and your storytelling technique is just gorgeous to read.
My one teensy bit of advice would be the whole show, don't tell. In those introductory paragraphs, rather than saying that she's socially awkward, give us an example- like she's clumsy or something. Aside from that, you've got a real little gem brewing here- excellent thus far!

This is an incredible story so far. The relationship between Bam and Sparks is definitely a big part of the story, and you've developed it incredibly well. Your use of dialogue, though a little heavy for my taste, really adds a personal element to the story that is especially important when writing in the third person limited. On that matter, I think you chose very well when considering what point of view to write this in - has it been from her point of view, it may have been harder to relate to, and gotten more stereotypical where you're story as it is differs from an overwhelming majority of the fan fiction that I've read before. Excellent work so far; keep it up!

@ The Human Slayer
Thanks chick!

Can I just say you are a good writer? I don't have to get far into the story to tell you that. I have always enjoyed your work. So far I am on chapter one and I enjoyed all the work you have put into the characters. It's obvious when you love and enjoy something because it show through your writing.

The story is kick ass so far, so let me read more so I can share the feelings of your other readers.

@ onlyme_1998
Well there's plenty more to come :) Thank you for your continued support and comments it means alot

Thank you so much for changing how this story ends. I like this new chapter awhole lot better:)

Thank you so much for changing how this story ends. I like this new chapter awhole lot better:)

@ onlyme_1998
I've been sitting here all day trying to decide whether that was how I really wanted to end it, and I'm thinking of deleting it and carrying on, I'm just not sure whether people would want it to carry on or not, simply because I have so much more that I can do for it

What the crap! Why would you end it like that. She didn't even get to marry Ryan. She didn't get to do many things
Why did you kill her off?!! I loved her character... Why? :'(

@ onlyme_1998
All will be revealed shortly

Ugh, ehats up with ryan?! I dont like whats going on

@ onlyme_1998
it's going to be crazy I assure you :)

Im glad she is finally being herself again. I thibj it was her ex that hit her... but I am probably wrong. Love the update though. And next we get to read about their thanks giving. Cant wait

@ Alice Verney
:)

that exboyfriend of hers is freaking nuts but yay i had a feeling she'd end up with dunn

@ onlyme_1998
Thanks :)

Oh my goodness that was fun to read! Can't wait to see what happens next and who wins the fat boy title

@ Derek's Wolf Angel
I can't wait to read it dear! <3

@ Matthew Sanders;
The next chapter will be up tomorrow since I didn't update for a while :) so glad that someone is enjoying this :)

I loved this update hun, I can't wait for more!