Clean. - Comments

Okay, I know I commented on this before but that was before I finished the series. I only finished it a couple weeks ago and this story has been on my mind ever since. I just got some time to actually read this through again. I read it about three times, but when I read that first sentence the first time... I felt goosebumps and started tearing up. I could hear the words flow through my mind in Jesse's voice. I could feel every little emotion he was feeling and I could just see him in front of me, a wreck, just like he was in this story. So I guess it's safe to say that I, too, am a wreck now, lol. I don't think I've expressed this enough: You are an AMAZING writer. This story proves it, and I hope you never, ever give up this talent of yours. :)

I'm so glad my comment made you happy :) everything I said was true. You really are a great writer. I'm looking forward to see what you wrote next :)

I'm so glad my comment made you happy :) everything I said was true. You really are a great writer. I'm looking forward to see what you wrote next :)

@ breaking-barricades
You have no idea how much that made me smile. Like, this almost brought me to tears. I'm screenshotting this comment and making it my wallpaper. You are the reason I write, comments like this are what make all the writers block and second guessing worth it. I've had such a hard time writing these last few months, and I was meant to continue this but everything got messed up for me. This right here just made me feel so much better. I promise that I'll start working on something if only just for you and post it soon. Thank you so much for this.

My god, this was amazing. Like, I honesty can't even explain it. The plot is great, the way you wrote this was amazing. This is me begging you to either continue this story or start a new one about Jesse because wow. I'll subscribe, recommend, comment, everything. Just please write more!

You don't know how happy I am to find someone who watched Breaking Bad! Your comment made my day. At the time I thought I did it wrong but now reading this and then re-reading the chapter, I see what you mean and agree. I didn't want to just throw Viv in the reader's face after the first chapter being Jesse-centric. What I'm doing is leaving her as a quiet support scheme for him and slowly but surely bringing out more of her personality so it isn't so overwhelming since Jesse is such a strong character. The story will always be Jesse's with Viv as the supporting role.

I'm going to continue this. I'm waiting to post until I'm done with the chapter I'm working on (#4) because I'm still unsure of some parts and want it perfect. Other than that, I hope you'll be pleased with her development throughout the story and Jesse's. I do have a few surprises planned as well! :D

Wow...this was just...wow. I think you captured Jesse perfectly, and it made perfect sense that the focus be on him. The intensity of his feelings was emphasized by the fact that Viv was portrayed merely as a background character and the cause of his thoughts. I think some of the emotion would have been lost if you'd gotten too involved with her at this point. I would love to see you continue this!!!! ^.^

@ Harleen.
Awh you're so welcome!!

@ Artist Vs. Poet
Thanks so much! *squeaks* I'm glad you liked it. Nice comments make my day :'3

I've never watched Breaking Bad but this story is beautiful nonetheless! I have so many feels! haha.
At first, I was like, "Well shoot, he's watching her leave. That's gotta hurt."
Then the line about the bad memory broke my heart in a good way! And that last line was absolutely amazing! I think you could totally turn this in to a chapter story! good job!

@ Harleen.
Well I will make sure to check it out when I have more time.

@ MattyBGirl
Thank you! I thought giving back story would take away from the present. Maybe I could get some readers who've never seen the show now. I suggest you give it a try, though. Breaking Bad kept me entertained since '08. ^o^

This is a nice start and has an interesting idea. I never watched Breaking Bad but this was perfect enough that I could follow it without knowing the background. Great job and keep it up!

Thank you, Ne! This motivation should get me a few more chapters. And I love your sig. :3

I am not at all familiar with the characters or Breaking Bad in general but this story is emotional and it pulls at the heart strings even when you're unfamiliar with anything going on. I hope you do continue writing it and to be honest, you're great at the male perspective and I think you should keep it up.