Scream - Comments

I'm here as a judge for the First A7X Contest.

I thought it was interesting that decided to make the guys into vampires. There hasn't be any supernatural elements in the other entries that I've read, so it was a nice change to see something different. It seemed a bit unrealistic to me that she decided to just stay with the guys after the werewolf incident, but I guess if you want to survive you do whatever you can. I think it would have been nice to have a bit more backstory involving the werewolves and why they were going after Renee, so maybe it wouldn't have seemed so sudden and odd that they were going after her. The ending was a bit surprising as well, though I think it was moreso surprising because I didn't really expect her to end up staying with them forever, since they were just some vampires who randomly picked her up, if that makes sense.

I did notice quite a few run on sentences and grammar issues throughout the story, so if you were to come back to it (since I know it's a few years old), I would suggest fixing those up.

Thanks for entering!

I really liked this! Great writing, and honestly, this is your first time writing smut???hot hot hot!! Picturing matt as a sexy vampire is drool worthy, lol. The ending was a surprise too, I didn't see it coming! Again, I loved it:)

HOOOOOOT.

For your first sex scene, it was FUCKING HOT AS HELL! I loved this one-shot. I loveeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeed it. Thank you so much for writing this for me!!!