No Hard Feelings - Comments

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I really like the quote that you start this off with. It got me interested in every way because I initially thought I was going to end up reading an argument between two people, but the words were a past utterance and really did hit home when I started reading through. Again, like with past works that I've read of yours, you've included a question that really draws the reader into the story right from the get-go, and I like that.

This is really heartbreaking though. I feel so bad for the narrator because I've been in that position myself and I know what that feels like. The emotions were really raw and overwhelming and it's...I was going to say lovely but not actually lovely. In a writing sense, it's lovely to see that in a story but in the context of the story, it's horrible. That makes no sense. I'm going to stop rambling now.

Concrit

I don't really have anything that I can mention.

Overall

Heartfelt piece, written well. Good job!

I felt this. Like I know that's weird, but I feel like this is how some girls will think in this situation. I know I have, which is why and how I like felt this and I enjoyed it on top of it. So wonderful piece :)

This is interesting, I actually really enjoy short pieces, rather than long so I liked that this is a drabble. The emotion in this is really raw, the only way you can make this better is by giving this drabble a relatable layout :)

Oh this is so beautiful. I truly love this! The way it ended gave me just a sense of beautiful sadness that I can feel throughout the whole thing even though it's short. Great work!

"I don't need more than you."
You started this piece with a sentence which left the lips of the other person years ago. It is quite a nice way to start this.

summer, should be capitalized.

I had to deal with losing my home, my city, my mind, but I never thought I would have to deal with losing you.
I could relate to that part a bit because when we are in our hardest moment, we believe the ones close to us will never leave us. Life likes showing us otherwise though.

The enjoyed the repeated words at the end, like she was trying to make herself believe it, and of course the last sentence which is the point of this drabble as well as the title of it.

I guess this has to be my third favorite.

~Marian.