Call Me a Thief - Comments

Oh my God!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
So I'm sitting here in a crowded room reading this, with tears burning behind my eyes!
I've NEVER cried at a fan fiction before, but I'm seriously so sad right now :(
Please update soon!!!!!!!!!!!!! xxx

This is ammmmmmaaaaazzzzzziiiiiiinnnnggggggggg!
update!

Oh my gosh! #feels LOOOOOOOOVE

IM SPEECHLESS!! I feel like such a school girl when I read this, seriously so cute. This is like my favourite story ever, so please update soon! :) xxxxx

I love your story and can't wait to see where it goes next. To answer your question in the author's note: Story Of My Life is a great segue from bubblegum-pop to a more subdued sound. It's my favorite song by them at the moment.

Update soon!

Absolutely adorable. I love your writing. You're so gifted. You must continue writing. Wonderful, my dear.

THIS IS SO CUTE I LOVE THIS

im so in love with this story its unreal.
love, love, loooooove it.
okay? okay cool yeah.
cant waaaait for the next chapter!

OK, so I randomly found this story... creeping Mibba. And omg. Please tell me this is a short story. PLEASE TELL ME. Everything is going so good now, and I'm super scared that heart breaking things is about to happen. This story is incredibly cute, and I just can't.

I'm absolutely in love with the way you portray Niall. And I'm in love with Cassidy. OK? I got completely lost in your writing, and your characters that I felt what they were feeling. And how excited Cassidy was when she got the call back.. and I... just ah. I can't. Seriously. I'm in love with this story and you're only four chapters in. BUT THEY'RE LONG CHAPTERS, WHICH MAKES IT EVEN BETTER. ah.

Twitter/fans drama... I'm kind of excited for that. I don't know why, but I like it when 1D stories mention twitter, and fans. Haha, especially when one of the boys tweet the girl. And I'm just like..

And they kissed... before they had Chinese food.

I've subscribed and recommended. <3

Only read till chapter 2, but youve always been able to capture my attention within the first few paragraphs.

Magnificent ol' sport. Just magnificent.

$100 for a meal tho..thats insane. I though $25 was bad. XD

Niall plz don't leave!!! :'(
TELL NIALL HE CAN'T LEAVE!!!
I would keep him foreverrrrr!

Really cute ! I really want to see how the titles going to work into it, I really like the main character too - very realistic :)

Subbed, can't wait to read more!

Niallll ... I want a niall

aww, this story is so cute... love it!!!

This is so fkn cute man. I'm blushing the whole time I'm reading, I'm in lurve.

OH MY GOD MIBBA. I CANT EVEN XD

Ur lame. Why would you delete his numbee? Sell that shit on ebay.

I think you do a great job with getting the reader immediately interested. Your first chapter leaves a lot of questions for the reader and it forces them to continue reading. I didn't really see any grammatical errors, so nice job on that. The concept is really interesting to me and like I said before, even if it wasn't interesting, the first chapter is so vague you really need to continue reading in order to feel satisfied. The only thing I would consider is being a little less liberal with your descriptions. I am in agreement with other commenters that you have a gift for imagery, but there was some points where I was getting a little lost in the metaphors. I would just switch it up from time to time in order to keep the reader from feeling bombarded by metaphors and similes. Overall, you have a really great start here! Good luck with your story! You've got wonderful descriptions throughout the story. I love your paragraph and chapter lengths. They're just about perfect. But, I would suggest proofreading a little. There are a few mistakes throughout the piece. Though the story is a little hard for me to follow (probably cause it's just not the genre I'm into), it's still sounds like it has great potential! Keep on writing! :)

Great story! I like your layout as well ;) really well put together

Ooooooooh! More more more more more!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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