Mad House - Comments

Oh the mother feather feels man!

My ovaries!!!

Love it

Ah this is so cool... love the plotline and the writing! update again soon :)

Already loving the summary and the layout. It gives it a very detrimental, yet great, feel to the atmosphere of the story. Also, the title of the first chapter is my favorite because Florence + the Machine.

Woo, okay so I'm not much of a fan of One Direction but this was interesting. Right away, you felt for Harry as the patient and you hated Dr. James are the insufferable asshole. You definitely gave a lot of character to Dr. James and I liked that; you could see just how much of a scum bag he is.

You also gave enough to were you felt bad for Millie. It also left you wondering why she needed the job so badly, even to put up with Dr. James' antics.

The only criticism I have is that there is the occasional grammar mistake or missing word, which is easily found by just re-reading, so no biggie there.

All in all, it was a great first chapter and it set the tone for the story very nicely. I've recc'd it! :)

Based on the summary, it sounds like a good story. Out of all the One Direction group writes, this feels very original.

At the very beginning of the chapter there really was an opportunity for detailing how the place was set up and just exactly how the doctor and Harry looked. It's more of a personal thing since I'm a bit of a detailist, but yeah.

The 'as' in He needed to keep himself calm as to avoid a repeat of last month's fiasco doesn't need to be there.

'woman's' instead of 'women's' in it would have to be the new opportunities to stare at a women's well-fitted ass or take out the 'a'.

Hopefully this new nurse will be some what decent looking
There is no space in somewhat.

I'm defiantly getting the gross out vibes fro Elliot. So good job with that.

I really like this. I can really see the AHS Asylum theme here and I think so far its being executed very well. Maybe just a bit more detailing but character wise everything is perfect.

AHS is amazing and I can sense this will be too!

Heck yeah first comment! So it's really funny that I find this story because today I stayed home from school sick, so I've been watching American Horror Story: Asylum ALL DAMN DAY! And if I'm not mistaken, that's where you're drawing inspiration from. This story is going to be one of my favorites :) good luck update soon

Heck yeah first comment! So it's really funny that I find this story because today I stayed home from school sick, so I've been watching American Horror Story: Asylum ALL DAMN DAY! And if I'm not mistaken, that's where you're drawing inspiration from. This story is going to be one of my favorites :) good luck update soon