Chance Encounters - Comments

Coide is an amazing name! <3 update?

This is great! :) I can't wait to see what you guys have in stores for this! Update soon? :)

@ castiel's vessel Also, because this story focuses on just more than one character we wanted to introduce them in the beginning. I could have spared some information later on but it fit now than later :)

@castiel's vessel I love your major insight and wish a lot more people would do so. I'll definitely go take a look at that one part and fix it. When I wrote it, it made sense at the time. Thank you for bringing this to my attention. As for Harry's character summary, I will also get that fixed. You are fabulous, thank you!

The only real thing I picked up from the first chapter was this line - Codie’s little red cooper had stayed hers and she didn’t off with it, but she didn’t use it often. - it's the bolded part I don't quite get. Do you mean that she didn't part with it or sell it? Because the "off" sounds really, well, off to me.

Oh, and I checked out the characters tab as well and spotted this - Harry learned what the value of a euro - under Harry's bio and if they're in London, don't you mean the value of the pound? The euro is what they use in Europe and in the UK we use the pound because that's our currency.

Anyway, I'm not sure what to think of the first chapter. It didn't really provide anything for me because it kind of felt like information dumping without a purpose? Like, I get that you meant to provide an insight to her background but I guess I feel that it could have been done across chapters rather than just in one.

There's not anything else that I can say as of yet. It did flow well and spelling and grammar was pretty grand as well, so I guess it's just a matter of waiting for other chapters to see exactly where this is planning on going.