Muther - Comments

i love this so much fuck

Please please PLEASE continue? <3

Would love an update, very interesting so far

@ breaking-barricades
I know longer chapters! oh gosh, I've been writing papers nonstop for school (which is no excuse bc i'm not even in college) and i dunno. it's hard for me, which is a really pathetic excuse. I guess they look longer than they really are before i save them? maybe I should write them in word. That'd probably work. and I'm horrible with being descriptive, haha. I'm trying though! Thank you for the feedback :)

My prayers have been answered, another chapter <3 The only thing that would make this story better is longer chapters! What also pulls readers in is if you SHOW what is happening rather than telling. Like it's easy to say something like, "She looked him in the eyes." But it's even better if you say something like "Her eyes bore into his piercing green ones and chills ran down her spine." (Kind of a bad example but it gets the point across haha) Lots of description - and the way you describe things, movements, voices, etc - make the puzzle pieces fit together, you know? I dunno, this is just some advice that I think about when I go to write something :-) As for the overseas idea, I think that the idea could definitely come in handy down the line. Just write what you think should happen. It's your story, so you make the rules :-) I'm eager to read the oncoming chapters! Keep up the good work!

I'm actually begging that you continue this because it's actually really good and I love Jason and how you make him out to be very polite and nice and wow my heart hurts. I really like this so pleaseeeee continue!!! I subscribed so you know I'll read!!! Good job! :-)

ugh i love Jason, please keep going!

this sounds pretty interesting, please keep going.