Windows - Comments

This is a good start. I can see potential here but maybe show more instead of telling. Write about the readers emotions and describe. I think how you set it up is good and I don't see any spelling or grammar mistakes so that's great :) Just make it a bit more gripping and you should be fine

Haha my kindle auTo corrects everything! Thx for
Letting me know!! :)

You should change the lay out so its easier for people to read. and I suggest you fix the title of the song & the artist name because it says 'totals by lords.' when its supposed to be Royals by Lorde. Other than that it is a very good story and I sure as hell will recommend it and subscribe!