The Pool Hall - Comments

This can't be the end. Theres more.right?? I'd kill for an update! So good

I need and update! Update pleaaase!

Yes Patrick he was at your house, and now the pictures are online.

Still a great story :)

Wait no you can't just end it like that!!!!

Just wait....this is only the beginning.

No! some idiot is going to mess it all up!

I am a little peeved that she left Patrick, I can see him being disappointed when he wakes.

The eating of words even. Sorry I'm barely awake

And the eating of worsa is about to start

@ lady_enigma
LOL..yea...but no fans witnessed at least. Of course....Pete will come to eat those words later on.

Haha, I absolutely loved that chapter. I loved the hangover, I loved the green puke, I loved the friendship between Patrick and Pete. I do have to say though, the line no witnesses no problem.... Have they forgotten the crowd that was watching them? Haha. Oh well. I wonder if they'll wind up doing it again

Please don't tell me this is the last chapter

@ lady_enigma
Thank you! Yea....love has nothing to do with any of this. :)

I have absolutely, just wow. Now words can describe how good that was. Like you said, its not a story about love its a story of lust. And yeah that was, well, wow

I have absolutely, just wow. Now words can describe how good that was. Like you said, its not a story about love its a story of lust. And yeah that was, well, wow

Holy. Shit.

this is really good so far. I Have to admit at first I was thinking it was a slash, but I like that it's actually not, it's really different to see a threesome story on here.

looking forward to the next chapter

I really like it! I likened that I could instantly tell that Angus was a bitch! And that Pete was a good friend who cared about Patrick, keep writing please!!! I really enjoyed that you showed off all of the guys' friendships and the way they interacted with each other. Your also a really good writer, the way you go about describing things so well. Haha, seriously tho I laughed so hard when I read the part where Pete threw the pic at Joe's head. To funny haha :)

Thank you so much! :)

Hey, I just wanted to let you know that I really like this story so far! Your Patrick is believable and I could really feel his pain, especially in Chapter 1. I also love that you have included aspects of his friendship with Pete, having Pete want to protect him from the pain in the first chapter and break him out of it in the second. Even your little interaction between Joe and Pete where Pete throws the pic at his head is good. Rachel seems interesting so far and I'd love to read what happens next!

Thanks for the advice. I would love to get a layout, but I haven't figured out how to do all that stuff yet. Any advice is greatly appreciated! I'm working on the next chapter tonight.