Green Haven - Comments

This was a really interesting story. I had no idea where that dream was coming from, but it's a great ending to have it being reality. It really leaves a lot of options for my mind to wander about this character's future, and more details about his past too. An eerie yet enjoyable story

Hey there! I'm here as a judge for the Magazine's Things that Go Bump contest.

Your story was very interesting indeed. I have to admit that the story didn't really grab me for the first few paragraphs but the more I read, the more I began to enjoy it. By the end, your story really had me wrapped into it, wondering what was going to happen and where the story was headed. I particularly loved the closing sentence because it opens up a reader's mind to the possibility. He thinks it ended, but has it really? It's very nice when a story like this can make a reader think about the future and think about everything that could still be awaiting the character. A story that can make you wonder is sometimes the best kinds of stories.

Your descriptions were beautiful and well written. The way you had them written conveyed a very precise and clear image to the reader of everything that was going on and what everyone looked like. You did very well on that. Description can be hard, particularly one that deals with horror and creepy themes in general. So to have done so well with the description to give your readers a clear image really does show how much talent you've got for writing.

Your story was a very good read that had me very interested until the end of it. I quite enjoyed it. Well done~

*Here from the Mibba magazine's contest*

To start with, those old gas masks scare the hell out of me so this story instantly captivated me!

This was very original and wonderfully written. Straight from the first sentence, you manage to grab the reader's interest. Your word choice and descriptions are brilliant, especially when it comes to the gas mask-wearing monsters themselves and his trauma in general. I adore the detail you put into everything; it's obvious you had a specific image in your mind and it's translated really well.

The way you've written this almost has a haunting tension to it, yet it's rather beautiful. Your sentence structure is great, which is a major plus because, to me, it proves just how talented you are.

This really is a fantastic piece of writing, so well done!