Confessions of a first time killer - Comments

thank you :) i kind of gave up on finishing the rest. although if you have any ideas you would like to suggest to add to the finished product, just message me. thank you for your input

This sounds like a really interesting story :) And so far, you've made it intriguing to read, which hooks a reader. But, what I would say, is that it would appear even better if you made a layout for it. Maybe you could have dark colours to represent the sinister storyline, rather than the Mibba colours that represent calmness (i.e blue and white). Also, there are a few places where punctuation could be better, but overall, I like this story a lot and I'll definitely read on xx