Chaos - Comments

You did a really good job on this. The imagery is perfect. It's very real, which is awesome. This is really what it's like to watch a thunderstorm. Right down to the part about it draining your energy.
Definitely jealous of your imagery abilities.

Sorry for the double post

You really have a way with words when it comes to description, every sentence adds a refreshing image to the one your reader is creating and it builds it up slowly, which I really like.

I thought lightening was misspelled but the dictionary I used said it could be a variant spelling of lightning. Other than that I didn't see any spelling mistakes and your grammar seems well done.

I like writing like this, where's there's no specific events or other characters, it's just one scene. I like how it's sort of thought-provoking when the character thinks about how humbling it is to be human during such a storm.

I really like your imagery in this piece. I felt I was there during the storm. I'm not too fond of storms, it depends really. So it's funny that I like pieces that talk about rain or storms and such.

The last paragraph I found relaxing if that makes any sort of sense…I thought your writing was so well done that I felt a storm could be going on and seeing as I don't like storms, your last paragraph sort of brought a calmness to the piece. I hope that makes sense.

I really like this. :) Good job