This was kinda very cool! Loved it.
November 5th, 2013 at 04:32pm
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I really thought that you did a killer job with the story. I thought that the title was really creative and worked really well. It was exactly what a title should be and that made me feel really good. You did a wonderful job with the adjectives you used and I thought that it was great. You chose your words wisely, and they were really masterful when you stop and think about them. You used really powerful words and that is important when you have so little words to tell a story.
I wish that the theme was a little more woven throughout. I really did enjoy how you wove the theme out, but I wish that it was a little more woven through the story. I think that Virtue is really hard, so you did do a good job, but it could have been great or wonderful.
Overall, I think you did a really awesome job and you should be really proud of yourself.