I'm glad you didn't take offense to it!! That was my only con crit, which means other than the POV changes I don't think you need to change a single thing. I really am excited for more!! :))
@ lizzicleromance As pixie said yes we now see all the pov changes are a bit difficult to understand so that will be sorted! Im happy that you like it so far and thank you for reading and commenting! *-*
@ lizzicleromance Ah, thanks! Glad you like it so far! =)
Yeah, about the POV thing... I've been thinking about it too, and, yeah, I don't like it like that... But, hey, it was a little test drive, and now it was confirmed that it's not the way to go... So, yay! =p
My lovely co-author and I will sort our things out, though... It's our first time working together, so...
Anyway, thanks so much for reading and for your input!!!! Xoxo
Okay! So, first, I love this. I think the characters are developing really well, I adore the storyline, I liked the interactions with Frank and his dad, and Frank and Ashley. Loved it, really.
My only criticism- and I promise this is constructive! Is maybe not do so many POV changes? I totally get like, one or two changes, but... I mean, a paragraph would happen, and the POV would change really quickly. It got a little confusing and harder to read... but other than that, it's great so far!! YAY!!
Yes we shall...;)