Wow! This is amazing. The layout definitely helps with imagining the creepy hospital. I'm excited to read more and get to know why Star is being kept in the hospital for experiments. You used such lovely, detailed descriptions. It made the story come to life. I only read the first two chapters but already the mystery and horror of the story has shown and made me want to know more. You writing style is really good too. One thing I think would make it better is to use pronouns more rather than always using her name because it becomes a little repetitive. Other than it's great!
December 17th, 2013 at 06:41pm