Backstabber - Comments

I have no idea about Team Fortress 2, Though I have heard of it... vaguely haha. But you did a great job as a writer and kept my attention to the end.

Which btw, the ending? O.O ... I won't give away the details for the readers but, you my dear, bravo. =]

You commented on my comment swap blog entry so I came here to return the favour.

First of all, I will gladly take this oneshot's comment virginity. So let me start.

Layout:
If we hide the comments and see the full screan, your layout is nice but the text is small and against the blood spots onf the background, the text is hard to read so I have to change it to default. I would suggest using the background as the background of the page and a hite background for the rest (chapter title, summary. chapters). The layout shows action and maybe thriller. Gonna like this.

Summary:
What you have written as the summary should be posted in the author's note. Adding a strong sentence taht shows the action of the piece would be great and it would pull the reader in.

Chapter 1/1:
I could picture everything perfectly on my mind and the descriptions were awesome. Seriously, well done!

Did you seriously just do that? I felt such satisfaction when the narrator escaped, and then BOOM!
I loved the ending, especial the French sentence. That was awesome!

Overall, if I have to comment on your writing skills, then I have to say that this piece deserves a perfect ten.

~Marian.