I want to start by laying down that I have a lot of trouble with this type of narrative and it tends to get me on edge for some reason. That being said, you got your point across and the story was quite heartbreaking. I was a bit confused in some spots, due to some choppiness and repetition, but overall, the piece was a success. There was a lack of emotion that I took artistically and found quite brilliant. Sometimes, with such dark and sad pieces as this, simplicity is key.
I liked it, but a little more editing would've helped! Even so, the sharp plot overrules it and makes any mistakes hardly noticeable. Keep it up! xx poison
I liked it, but a little more editing would've helped! Even so, the sharp plot overrules it and makes any mistakes hardly noticeable. Keep it up! xx poison