Broken - Comments

I enjoyed reading this story, i look foward to reading the rest of it when you post it. I think you should add a bit more dialoge within the characters, it gives the reader more insight on the characters but very good job so far.

I enjoyed reading this story, i look foward to reading the rest of it when you post it. I think you should add a bit more dialoge within the characters, it gives the reader more insight on the characters but very good job so far.

This story is really neat! I like how it wasn’t some sort of automatic falling in love for them; that hardly ever makes sense and really hurts the flow of the story. I also enjoy that you created a backstory of Vanessa’s abuse (not that abuse is anything to be glorified, but…) so that it isn’t just randomly her family hating her. The stark contrast between your main characters (I’m assuming Harry will be the main male character) creates a really cool effect; Vanessa, with her quietness, and Harry with hardly any social inhibitions, or so it seems. But music being the thing to unite them is also something really cool. The only thing that I might suggest would be to add more dialogue; it gives great insight and really helps with your character development. Love it though!

I love it. I can't wait for the next chapter! :)

Yeah I like where your going with this

This sounds(well looks) really good so far good work

This sounds(well looks) really good so far good work