Black - Comments

@ mymomislysolcrazy
Thank you so much! :) I'm glad you enjoyed it :D :D xx

From the first line, I was drawn into this story and the character’s personality. Using the same paragraph for the beginning of a story and the end of a story is usually a bit risky because it may make the reader bored, but for me it emphasized the pain of his timing. Though the reader only gets the story from the perspective of Fin, I liked how well your writing emphasized the personality of the girl he is talking about. I love the way that she thinks of her insides are bad like her teeth. Maybe I liked the story so well because usually in story based off of love quotes, there is a happy and hopeful ending, but it is clear that Fin never gets his beautiful ending. I love love love how you make Fin the main character, but make it easy to connect more with the girl than with the guy. Usually the girl is featured as the sappy one who falls in love, so it was refreshing to read a love story that was the other way around. Great entry overall and best of luck in future stories.

You're welcome. ♥

@ Theo Rossi;
Awww, thankyou so much <3 Have a wonderful day too!

This is incredibly sad, but yet good. I have no words at how talented you are at writing it shows in here.

Anyways, you are talented and keep up the good work. I do hope you have a wonderful day.