The Desolate - Comments

I am sooo sorry it's late, but better late than never! I promised I'd judge the entry and I'm sticking with it!

I want to start off by saying, you're a phenomenal writer. Your diction is wonderful and you are able to capture emotions wonderfully and you did a great job. I loved how you integrated sentence and how you made it part of Sarah's speech. It was a very powerful place to put the sentence and it was not just a throw away and that was a really great aspect to the story.

I wish that you had developed Joe a little more. I felt that I needed him to be a little more fleshed out than he was and I felt that he was an important component of the story as well.

Overall, I think your story was just incredible!

(Valentine's Giveaway Comment)

This one-shot was amazing! I loved the description and emotion poured into every sentence of this story. I loved how the main character stuttered at every word since she was traumatized from the accident. Even though I have never been in a car crash, the main character is very relatable and realistic. And the layout is super awesome and I love how it adds to the story. Awesome job and keep on writing!

I love how you set up the story. It's sad, but yet somehow beautiful. I love how you pay attention to detail. It's absolutely beautiful.

The layout really sets up the story. It gives the right tone to the story.

You are a talented writer. Keep up the good work.