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I’m here as the new host for ‘Same Love Contest’.

This was such a cute one-shot, oh my god. I wasn’t even aware that it was a fanfic until the author’s note. You did so well with introducing the characters and all of their relationships to me that it honestly read like original fiction. I loved the amount of detail you put into all of Haruna’s emotions. The only premise of this story was that being vulnerable is still being strong, and I love how you conveyed that. A lot of people think that you can’t cry or be weak to be strong, but they don’t realize that it takes a certain amount of courage and strength to admit you need help, too. I loved that Haruna actually said she needed help to Tomomi. It was weighted and a very poignant moment. You fit a lot of character development into this with the emotions and how Tomomi confronted her. I definitely love the dynamic between Haruna and Tomomi and I was so happy that Haruna felt the same! I love cute and fluffy happy endings!

I also loved your prose as it was detailed, but not so much so that I was overwhelmed or bored. It was very pleasant, it had a consistent flow to the entire thing, and it was very enjoyable.

Great job!

Really good, I love how easy the words flowed through the story. I felt that everyone could relate one way or another. With the love for others or the fear of breaking down in front of others.

Aw, this was so cute!
I've heard of SCANDAL but I've never read anything about them before, and I really enjoyed it.
The dynamic with the group was so interesting, and I loved how everyone really seemed to care about each other, even if they showed it in different ways.
I read your authors note at the end and I think it's great how you took a real event from the band and kind of looked deeper into the emotions and what went on. It was so creative, and must have been fun to write.
Your grammar and spelling is impeccable, there was literally one paragraph near the end where I noticed two tiny mistakes, like missing words, but I was to intrigued by the story to stop and jot them down, and they didn't take away from anything.
This was just so great, thank you for entering it in my contest! Results should be posted shortly :)