This was definitely a tragic and bittersweet story. I really wanted Levi to wake up from his coma and tell Oliver himself that he was gay and loved him. I definitely didn’t want Levi to go back to such an abusive situation, I just wish that he would have told Oliver or someone else so that they could have helped Levi. I really don’t like the whole “commits suicide because of their sexuality” trope so I think I was bound to not enjoy the ending for more reasons other than it was sad. I want LGBT+ characters to be happy because they deserve that, so I was so disappointed Levi didn’t make it and all Oliver had was this written declaration of love. Oliver didn’t even know he was gay, it was sad. I do feel like you created a really nice relationship between the two, even though I only really saw the end of it. There was a lot of love and concern there in how Oliver stressed over Levi not coming to school and wearing long sleeved shirts, and I really liked it.
However, although I liked the journal format, I also felt like because of it, a lot of needed detail was missing. I didn’t really connect to Oliver or Levi because it was too short. I understood that Oliver was a really sweet kid that was confident in his sexuality and he had a crush on his best friend, but that’s really it. I didn’t actually connect to him, which was sad. I feel like if maybe you wrote it with more emotions, it would be easier. The entire thing kind of felt rushed, like you were skimming over the overall storyline rather than delving into the emotions. It would make more sense for Oliver to pour his heart and soul into a journal rather than write about everything so shallowly. I do like that he released the journal two years later though. It was a sentimental touch.
Overall, I thought this was a really emotional and sad one-shot so good job.
This was definitely a tragic and bittersweet story. I really wanted Levi to wake up from his coma and tell Oliver himself that he was gay and loved him. I definitely didn’t want Levi to go back to such an abusive situation, I just wish that he would have told Oliver or someone else so that they could have helped Levi. I really don’t like the whole “commits suicide because of their sexuality” trope so I think I was bound to not enjoy the ending for more reasons other than it was sad. I want LGBT+ characters to be happy because they deserve that, so I was so disappointed Levi didn’t make it and all Oliver had was this written declaration of love. Oliver didn’t even know he was gay, it was sad. I do feel like you created a really nice relationship between the two, even though I only really saw the end of it. There was a lot of love and concern there in how Oliver stressed over Levi not coming to school and wearing long sleeved shirts, and I really liked it.
However, although I liked the journal format, I also felt like because of it, a lot of needed detail was missing. I didn’t really connect to Oliver or Levi because it was too short. I understood that Oliver was a really sweet kid that was confident in his sexuality and he had a crush on his best friend, but that’s really it. I didn’t actually connect to him, which was sad. I feel like if maybe you wrote it with more emotions, it would be easier. The entire thing kind of felt rushed, like you were skimming over the overall storyline rather than delving into the emotions. It would make more sense for Oliver to pour his heart and soul into a journal rather than write about everything so shallowly. I do like that he released the journal two years later though. It was a sentimental touch.
Overall, I thought this was a really emotional and sad one-shot so good job.