Harvard Girl - Comments

BrittanyMorgan (100)

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Love this story! Can't wait for an update!! :D

January 30th, 2014 at 09:41pm

laskater87 (100)

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love

December 23rd, 2013 at 01:46am

dallahaundra (100)

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@ morticians-daughter
I usually update a couple times a week, I just started this yesterday, so I'm not quite sure yet!

December 15th, 2013 at 04:03pm

morticians-daughter (100)

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When do you update? (Soon hopefully). This story is already great and It just started!

December 15th, 2013 at 03:51pm

Yo-Cakes; (100)

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So I think this story is actually pretty good, but you shouldn't be too specific and break down every word for the reader like: didn't = did not. Try not to use a lot of short sentences.

Try to also use less dialogue and more description, more emotion because you're leading the readers into more of a shaky start. But other than that, I am interested in your story! (:

December 15th, 2013 at 04:31am