Take a Chance - Comments

First I noticed the layout. Love it. Second, I noticed your descriptions. Beautiful. And then I just got lost in the story. So the pluses I have are that your descriptions are vivid and beautiful, and there are no grammar mistakes that I saw. The negatives, are... well I can't think of any. :)

Okay, so this is naturally not my cup of tea, but aside from that fact this seems to have mounds of potential. I really love the flow of this story. I understand that you don't usually write in third person pint of view, but with this story, it completely works with it.

I love the layout, it allows for the atmosphere of the story to fully come out. Tori seems like such a sweetheart of a character and I can't see why she would fall for a douchebag of a character as Nick. He seemed fine at first. The guy that every girl on campus would love to date, but then towards the end, you realize that he is a jerkwad.

I genuinely like this story. I will rec it and I might possibly wait for the next chapter to come out. :D

i really love this!