OMG! Update soon, yeah? I'm interested in this "Falcon"'s history and past. And of Alice. >.< She's seems mysterious, powerful though! LOLOLOL Zak takes her on as an apprentice/takes her on lockdowns!
The title pulled me in and the story kept me there. I'm a HUGE NecroFusion fan lol...Eleven Heaven is my personal favorite. Anyway, onto the story.
I'm intrigued to know who and what Falcon is, and what Zak intends to do about him. If I were to offer up an critique, I'd say slow down and add some depth and dimension to the story. Give your characters life and not just interaction with each other if that makes sense. Eager to see where this goes!
This was intriguing; I like creepy sort of stories, so I was quite interested in reading this. Your attention to detail is perfect, there's not too much or too little. I could easily picture everything. And then overall, it's just really well written. It all flows nicely.
Plot wise, this is different from other creepy stories. I'm not sure what Necrofusion means, aha, but apparently nobody else does anyway. At first, it kind of reminded me of "The Yellow Wallpaper," you know that story about the woman who goes insane trapped in her room, seeing things in the wallpaper. I thought it was going to be something like that, but this Zak guy makes it all the more interesting.
@ herobrine. I have no idea what Necrofusion means either XD It was the title of his side project and it was never explained. This is really my take on the meaning. I'm really glad you like it :D
I have no idea what Ghost Adventures is but Necrofusion is one of the most awesomely awesome words I've ever come across and that's what caught my attention here. Ghosts? Science? Death, gore, Frankenstein doctors?