Hitting The Showers - Comments

You should make this chaptered bc now that tey are dating if Zack wanted to do it again he still has the picture to use as blackmail and even though they'd had the threesome who would believe jack an Alex? So that's like drama, I really loved this as a two shot but you could make it chaptered very easily and I think it would be brilliant!

@ DamnBarakat
Well, you're welcome, haha!

@ brxndneweyes
No, of course not! I really appreciated it actually. I would never improve if it were not for constructive criticism :D

@ DamnBarakat
I just hope I didn't sound bitchy. :') Alex and Jack as swimmers, yummy.

@ brxndneweyes
Thank you! I'll take your advice next time, when writing this sort of story :)

I liked this concept! I do have some con-crit, I hope I don't sound rude.

- less exclamation marks outside of dialogue

- the terms wood, rod and meat in reference to a penis are somewhat of a turn-off

I did like the descriptions involving their balls though, testicles seem to get left out in fics.

I'm laughing so hard at this oh my god no

Do you know that is great right? :) not a huge part of threesome but wow okay this is good! <33 well done!

@ fioleeandjalex5ever2
Hehe ;)

oh.my.threesome

YYYYYEEESSS HOLY FUCKING SHIT I LOVW TOU OH MH GOD

@ pasty-face
I was going to make it chaptered but decided against doing so, as I already have two chaptered fics at the moment and even that is some times a struggle. However, I have started writing a few mini fics... ;)

YAY FOR PART TWO. Is it bad that I really want this to become chaptered??? ITS SO GOOD MAN

THAT WAS SO HOT OMG

@ alltimelcw
Thank you! I think I might do actually... Maybe like a two-shot or something ;D

HOLY SHIT HOLY FUCKING SHIT I NEED A COLD SHOWER JESUS CHRIST THAT WAS FUCKING HOT OH MY GOD U SHOULD WRITE LIKE A CONTINUATION CHAPTER PLS & jfc you are a good writer oh my fuck