A Rocker's Guide to Becoming a Father - Comments

@Haylie Jade To be honest, this is such an old story, and I agree with you, Sophia isn't in this that much. When I first wrote it, I was nine. But I loved it so much I changed things around a bit and made things different. It still needs a lot of work. But it quickly became my favorite! Thank you for reading!! Means a lot to me. :)

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I'm not going to lie - even before I asked you where I should start with your stories, this was the one that I was most drawn to. The title sounded promising. I love father/child fan fictions, and to me it sounded like that was what it was going to be. The summary made it sound unique too, so I was excited to get started.

But the story turned out not to be like that at all. I feel like Sophia really has little to do with the story, and it could have been achieved without her having been born. To me, the story is more about Brian and Michelle's relationship - how it falls apart, how he tries to win her back, etc. So I feel like the title isn't all that fitting, and that maybe there should have been more written about Sophia and the way that Brian came to terms with being a first-time father.

Other than that, I think the story is quite exciting. I'm always on my toes, wondering if Michelle's cheating is always in Brian's head or if it's actually happening. I want to strangle Johnny after this last chapter, and I feel really bad for Brian. But at the same time, I hope he and Hailey get together. I think they could go a long way.

An interesting read! =)

@ HerNameIsAlice
Yes, it will be explained in the next chapter.

Oh, shit! So Hailey was dating Johnny and Bri was with Chelle. Chelle then cheated on Brian (will that be explained?) with Johnny (what a douche... but he's hot). Whoa. But to me the reason Brian wanted to be with Michelle is cuz he's scared of being alone.

@ Sweet n Vaded
Oh, shit.

@ HerNameIsAlice
It's really all in his head; but yes...in the end...she does cheat on him. that happens chapter fourteen.

Wait so is she really cheating on him?

So much suspicion !!

@ HerNameIsAlice
See they are...but when I post it here it changes. I'll work on fixing it. I have it posted on 2 other sites.

@ Sweet n Vaded
Haha, ok! And just a small suggestion if I may. The thoughts could be in italics. I'm reading them and I'm kinda getting confused too, haha!

@ HerNameIsAlice
Sorry I am done for the evening, and it's a mixture of Jealousy, and the fact that he reall does love Hailey too...but he likes the idea of being in love with Michelle. So he gets Jealous when anyone touches what belongs to him. But it works itself out. :) I will post more in the morning. your notifications will breathe easy for a bit. hahaha

Is it jealousy?

So many email notifications, haha!

@ HerNameIsAlice
Thank you. It's very fun to write. :)

@ Sweet n Vaded
No problem! It's great!

@ HerNameIsAlice
haha, sorry! I have fourteen chapters written and ready to post. lol. So I'm trying to get them up before I get home. Thanks for reading!

You're posting update after update and I'm kinda scared, haha!

Oh, this is so awesome so far! Jesus, Michelle is a hardcore badass, haha! I wonder what the future is gonna hold for Brian and Hailey. Are they going to end up together? Will Michelle become a step mom? Can't wait for more!