Closets Are For Clothes - Comments

Alrighty so!

Gonna start with the layout: could've used something different. But hey, the polka dots definitely went with your first chapter.

Okay, so.. Your writing needs a bit of work in this story. Don't get me wrong, I liked it. I was kind of giddy about the whole Noel/Cassidy thing and smiled when it came to Re and Jer. The story is cute, all in all, but needs more detail. I couldn't really bring myself to understand why she went crying in the closet all because she saw a pretty girl... Or was there more to that? Also, you could've made the story a lot longer with just a bit more detail. There's quite a bit of time frame missing... Like, going from kissing and sex straight to being together for two months. I feel as if you rushed through the story when you could've made something so much bigger and better out of it.

Hey!

Ah hah! The first thing I’d say is, that I love how light hearted the story is, despite the heavy background. I found myself smiling every few seconds. You can totally relate to Cass and her friends.

This was an adorable short story, with a sweet ending. Fabulously done. The only complain I have though…is description. I know it might just be your writing style, but it’d be so fantastic if you could add a bit of description here and there, and not comprise the whole chapter of dialogues alone. Just my thought, I thought I’d convey it.

Overall, short and sweet. Well done!

I absolutely love how much they joke around together. It really reminds me of what me and my friends do, so I can really relate to that. I hope Cassidy decides to come out of the closet! It's a shame that she's so scared of what other people think that she feels she can't be her true self, but sadly, that's what our society does to people. I hope she can make it through this with the help of her friends!

I'm here as a judge for the Magazine contest!

I love how lighthearted this whole thing is! The pickup war was absolutely fabulous, it reminds me of many lunchtimes spent at university doing the exact same thing so I think in that respect, I immediately warmed to the characters and found that I connected with them more as the story went on. It's just one of those things that you know other people do for a laugh so it really does add this wonderfully lighthearted air to the whole chapter, despite the negativity that Cassidy feels when kissing Allison. You keep that lovely banter up throughout and I really think that's great because without it, I think the story would be quite heavy to read. I love how you end it with her little notepad entry though! The last part was especially great, I loved that she moved past what she was worried about and managed to come out, get a lovely girlfriend and get her two friends together in the process!

First, I'd like to say that I love the title because that's pretty clever to me. I love how you immediately set the mood of the story with a light-hearted bit of banter between Allison and Jeremy. I'm definitely going to send these to my friends to have a good laugh. Cassidy's an interesting character to me and I feel a bit bad for her when she kisses Allison because she freaks out. I laughed out loud when I read about the "She wants the V" thing. Too perfect and I loved it so much! I think you describe the scenes well and that you really can connect the reader to the characters. I think that this story has a ton of potential! Great job on this!

Ahhhh! I love it need more! :) its cute I'm glad that they all got together :)