The Death of a Chimney Sweep - Comments

@ Ghoul Scouts
Aha, thanks! I think I wrote this back in, like, my Freshman year of high school: it's such nostalgia to hear feedback like that. I'm glad you liked it!

Wow, this was incredible! I loved the time period you picked too.
He inhaled to scream only to catch smoke and embers in his mouth that burned holes into his tongue.

That line gave me chills all over my body. Wonderful piece with the perfect amount of darkness.

Oh, wow, very short and dark, but I liked it. You should definitely write more original fiction, you're a good writer

I liked this very much. It was very dark.
The only thing I didn't like was the sentence you chose to end with. It doesn't feel like it ends the story very well. I don't know why "He was suddenly cold." might fit better? Or "He was suddenly cold; the wind had left his hair."? I don't know.

But I still liked it. :)